This is a peer review of the video created by Julia Delices during our week two assignment where we created a digital story. Feedback is provided, using the RISE Model. I have embedded the video for easy viewing, or you can link to the original blog post of Ms. Delices – WK2 Project: My Digital Story.
RISE Model peer review:
I really connected with the idea of your passion turning into a stronger flame. This strengthening of my own passion, from spark to flame, has been my personal journey and experience thus far at Full Sail University. You did a great job of capturing images of yourself that really helped me connect to your story, especially in the second half of your digital story. This has made me reconsider some parts of my own digital story, to see if there are additional personal images I could use, to add greater impact to my own story.
In your opening, I think you were trying to communicate that you had hit a wall of frustration. That you were perhaps working in jobs you didn’t enjoy, and perhaps at a wage that made life difficult. My initial thought is that this was intended to lead towards your comments at around the 20-second mark in your video. That is the point where you reference your determination and resilience. Did I capture this correctly?
Have you considered either recreating the initial image using your own photos or using an image of a woman? I feel it may have a stronger impact with the voiceover, since it is a female voice. You might even consider adding an additional image to reflect the personal challenges you were facing, and better explain what dream you had wanted to bring into reality, before your bad experiences.
As you move forward in the expansion and repurpose of your video, you might consider adding additional details of your bad experience. I had really felt I wanted to know more about your story at that point. You could also consider expanding how you found your renewed determination and resilience. Was there an event or experience that sparked this shift? And a final consideration would be to also expand on what element of media you have become passionate about. It would help to further explain what kind of flame your passion has turned into.