Following is a RISE peer review of the video profile assignment for Valerie Allison.
The video being reviewed can be located HERE
( http://youtu.be/NStfp00GjzI )
Valerie, I love that you have incorporated family into the theme for your profile video. Family plays such a huge role in many peoples lives, and giving an insight into your own family allows us to learn and understand a little bit more about who you are as an individual.
The element of family reminded me again to revisit inserting myself more solidly in my own video profile. While my video represents a personal escape into literature, i only used a couple of shots that truly pull me into my own video. My primary shot used in my own project was a video clip of my turning a page that is laid over the top of other footage. While effective, I may revisit how i could better incorporate myself into the image. I also really liked how you used text throughout the video. It gives an additional method of telling your story which I chose not to use in my own. I may consider revisiting this idea in my own video – just to see if that could be something complimentary to my own narration.
What I get from your video is a sense there is a lot of activity within your home, but it all works cohesively together. I believe you mentioned drawing a greater sense of love into your video. There is certainly love showing in the video. I wonder if there is a way to show even more interaction between everyone in the video. If you are aiming to show love and cohesion in the home, it might be great to add a full family activity into the mix. A thought to consider. It is also clear how important the dogs are as a part of your family. I feel confident that was part of your intent.
You made an interesting shift in music from weeks two to weeks three. While I understand the logic, I wonder if it might be worth investigating yet a third musical element that falls somewhere between the two pieces. I really enjoyed the more active energy of the first piece, as it played well with the playfulness of the dogs and children. The second piece, certainly reflects a more soothing soundtrack, but I feel it may lose something in the transition.
One thing you might consider is locating a solo instrument track. In my own searching, i found a number of magnificent solo piano pieces that could give the soothing element you are seeking, while also adding a bit of energy. The font you chose is exciting and fun. I feel that against your footage, the white color pops a lot better than the black. You might consider shifting to all white. Though I understand the use of alternating colors to show transition.
As for really elevating this project, you might consider adding a narration to the full piece. The narration could tell a story beyond the introductions shown in the various title screens. Just a consideration. Another really fun thing to consider where your audio track is concerned, would be adjusting the levels throughout the track. While the music naturally flows through crescendo and decrescendo moments, manipulating this further could be very effective. In my own project, I even went as far as alternating sound into one ear or the other – simply to give an impact. This could also be a very effective technique in your own video. Maybe even by isolating the TV sounds into only one ear if possible, or moving it around to appear as though coming from behind, or in front. Techniques I have not personally perfected, but ones I wish to more solidly develop in my own piece.
All in all a great introduction to your family through your video profile. You captured great shots to use in your video, and i can see how easily you can move forward to make this an even stronger piece. I look forward to seeing your upcoming revision this week.